The drumbeat at 00:35 was incredibly off. It felt like a sample loop was just plastered over it and you didn't even bother to make it match the BPM of the melody. The buildup to that wasn't all that great either. It gets pretty repetitive and the key on some of the side instruments is off at times. The electro crash cymbal to end it off was completely off and actually freaked me out for a second. And aside from that crash cymbal, this isn't electronic. At all. I do mess up on my genres though sometimes, so I can't really judge that. The song would feel right at home as maybe a 25 second loop, but as a whole minute and fifty four seconds long, that length just doesn't work. There's more I could complain about, but I feel like I've said enough already.
I'm really sorry if it sounded like I was just a hater ranting on your music, but I'm just trying to give you some advice for your music. You have potential though, I'll give you that. Might follow you to see how you improve. Just keep at it and you'll get better! :)
- Evilgrapez